{"id":604,"date":"2013-01-04T00:49:05","date_gmt":"2013-01-04T00:49:05","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/www.eou.edu\/writing-center\/?page_id=604"},"modified":"2022-04-13T21:38:40","modified_gmt":"2022-04-13T21:38:40","slug":"owl-practice-draft-3","status":"publish","type":"page","link":"https:\/\/www.eou.edu\/writing-center\/owl-practice-draft-3\/","title":{"rendered":"OWL Practice Draft #3"},"content":{"rendered":"\n<p>Note that information below relates to the fields which students complete on the &#8220;Submit an Initial Draft&#8221; form on the OWL. Print out a copy of the form so that you can review the questions that prompted the answers below.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>This is exactly how a draft would appear in an email sent to you from the OWL Manager via email:<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>_______________________________________________________<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>* * * * * Writing Lab &#8211; Initial Student Paper * * * * *<br>Lynn<br>Newton<br>email<br>phone<br>DDE_Student<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>* * * * * To respond to student from this e-mail, use Forward, rather than Reply * * * *<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>FreshmanEnglish 205, Writers of the British Isle<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Hunter<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>First Essay Topic:<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>discuss teh treatments of war in Beowulf and Morte Darthur, paying close<br>attention to the literal or figurative treatment of fratricide- the &#8220;sin<br>of Cain&#8221;- as it appears in the works. In both works, the interwined<br>destinies of family and civil society mean that family and extended<br>kinship ties will be broken in time of war. compare and contrast how<br>these issues are presented in teh two works.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>overdue<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Ready to submit<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>How to find and correct micro-sentence-level errors<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>I&#8217;m discussing the topic of fratricide in the two works<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>In Beowulf, the symboilic allusions to fratrcide sketch out a &#8220;good vs.<br>evil&#8221; theme, where as in Morte Darthur, the focus on fratrcide is indirect<br>and the theme is repentenace.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>I&#8217;m not sure if the way my citations are correctly formatted there was no<br>direction<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Lynn, Newton, &#8220;A Symbolic Reference to Genesis&#8221;<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>English 205<br>Writers of the British Isles<br>Prof. Hunter, A Symbolic Reference to Genesis\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The influence of Christianity on Middle English literature can be seen<br>in a variety of period texts. More specifically, biblical references to<br>fratricide can be found in the epic tale of Beowulf as a representation of<br>Christian thought, good vs. evil. In Sir Thomas Mallory\u00eds Morte Darthur,<br>allusions to the sin of Cain are weaved into the stories themed around<br>Christian beliefs of redemption.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The tale of Beowulf unfolds in a Mid-evil society blitzed with war.<br>The author makes many allusions to Christianity in his poetry, even though<br>this particular story is was written adaptation of a pagan oral poem.<br>*** The religious influence during the time Beowulf was written seems to<br>help the author convey his understanding of war, the human condition and<br>the role that sin plays by our separation from God.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The author alludes to books of the Old Testament which are intertwined<br>with the dark and often bloody lyrics of this poem. We know that Beowulf\u00ed<br>s persona is essentially good, because he has won favor in the eyes of<br>God. After Beowulf defeats Grendel he speaks of God\u00eds will saying, \u00ecThe<br>Lord allowed it.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Through Beowulf the author describes the evil nature of Grendel, \u00ecLike<br>a man outlawed for wickedness, he must await the mighty judgment of God in<br>majesty.\u00ee Based on the premise that anything not of God is evil, Grendel<br>would represent evil. Grendel, separated from God by sin, is also a<br>direct descendent of the Biblical Cain.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Beowulf is a heroic warrior who bravely battles and defeats the<br>Grendel, Grendel\u00eds mother and the dragon, all decedents of Cain. We know<br>that Beowulf believes in God and therefore symbolizes that he of Gods<br>divine will by conquering the evil monsters.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Metaphorically, the poem is written in a way so that all that is<br>deemed \u00ecgood\u00ee in the world, even war and death is of God\u00eds divine will.<br>Separation, or evil, occurs in this case for those who have sinned against<br>God and have not repented.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** A major explanation of separation can be found in the biblical<br>references pertaining to the sin of Cain. Allusions to this important<br>Christian tale can be evaluated further by reading Genesis 4.<br>***In short, the text describes the first recorded act of fratricide in<br>the Bible when Cain kills Able. Two brothers were in the field one day;<br>Cain rose against his brother and killed him. The following verses<br>describe how the tribes of Adam and Eve (mother and father of Cain and<br>Able) were separated.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** God told Cain, \u00ecSo now you are cursed from the earth, which has<br>opened its mouth to receive your brother\u00eds blood from your hand. When you<br>till the ground, it shall no longer yield its strength to you. A fugitive<br>and a vagabond you shall be on the earth.\u00ee (1)<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** In Beowulf we know that Grendel and his mother live under the ground.<br>We also know that Grendel is \u00ecfrom the seed of Cain\u00ee. This is a symbolic<br>figure of evil, since Christian belief dictates that sin is what separates<br>us from God.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Because Cain sinned, he would endure an eternal separation from God.<br>Biblically, fratricide is an unpardonable sin. Cain did not repent, and<br>therefore God put a mark on him, banishing him from his homeland.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** God did not avenge Cain with death; rather, Cain was separated from<br>the tribe of Adam and became a wanderer with no place in society. An<br>allusion to the split tribe of Adam can be found in Beowulf\u00eds lines<br>1725-1728: \u00ecit is a great wonder how Almighty God in His magnificence<br>favors our race with rank and scope ad the gift of wisdom.\u00ee Since Grendel<br>is from the seed of Cain, it is assumed that Beowulf\u00eds race can only be<br>from the Tribe of Adam, and therefore, is favorable in the eyes of the<br>Lord God.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** This allusion to race and banishment of Cain\u00eds tribe is also<br>suggested in lines 2291-2292 of Beowulf, \u00ecSo many a man not marked by fate<br>easily escape exile and woe by the grace of God.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Recall that God had told Cain, \u00ecyou are cursed\u00ee because he committed<br>sin and did not repent. The separation from God would cause Cain to be \u00ecA<br>fugitive and a vagabond you shall be on the earth.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** We know that in lines 2354-2355 Beowulf defeats evil when fighting<br>Grendel. \u00ecHe out grappled the monster and his evil kin.\u00ee Thus the<br>classic battle of good vs. evil is apparent in the poem. Grendel and his<br>mother represent the spawn of Cain<br>The dragon is pure evil. They all live under ground, where Abel\u00eds blood<br>spilt into the earth. Since Cain was marked and exiled, so too are his<br>offspring. Like the prince that died in Beowulf\u00eds story, there is no<br>vengeance for killing a brother.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The sin of fratricide is an especially important symbolism in<br>Beowulf. Lines 2435-2440 of Beowulf speak of King Hrethel\u00eds sons. \u00ecFor<br>the eldest, Herebeald, an unexpected deathbed was laid out, through a<br>brother\u00eds doing \/when Haethcyn bent his horn-tipped bow\/and loosed the<br>arrow that destroyed his life. \/He shot wide and buried a shaft\/in the<br>flesh and blood of his own brother.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The descriptive poetry describes the mortal sin of fratricide with<br>dark lyrics, portraying that this appalling act of killing is indeed a<br>grave social injustice. It is also described in Beowulf that there is<br>nothing anyone could do to avenge the princes\u00ed death. As in those days,<br>the killing of one from outside the family was an act of vengeance.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** However, vengeance for fratricide, the killing within ones own<br>family, could not occur in their society. In Genesis, God put strife upon<br>Cain\u00eds life and banished him. Similarly, when dealing with the death of<br>Herebeald, the lord of the Geats said he \u00eccould not punish the killer in<br>accordance with the law of the blood-feud, although he felt no love for<br>him.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The dragon is symbolic of satin in that he too lives beneath the<br>earth. Beowulf attacks the dragon: (Lines 2514-2515): \u00ecIf the evil one<br>will only abandon his earth-fort and face me in the open.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Beowulf, who is the divine hero of the poem claims of his comrades<br>that, \u00ecSent my whole brave highborn clan\/to their final doom. Now I must<br>follow them.\u00ee This is an excellent illustration of how Beowulf feels on<br>topics concerning the kinship and loyalty in war.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Additionally the social perception of loyalty and kinship during war<br>can be examined in lines 2600-2602: \u00ecin a man of worth the claims of<br>kinship cannot be denied.\u00ee The heroic warriors in Beowulf are portrayed<br>as noble, and, therefore, of goodness and not the spawn of evil. Perhaps<br>the outstanding social acceptance of the warriors is and authors attempt<br>to build religious theme into the pagan poem.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Other particulars are sprinkled through out the poem, showing just<br>how elevated the author has portrayed Beowulf, even making him seem<br>Christ-like. Lines 2843-2834 state, \u00ecThe treasure had been won, bought<br>and paid for by Beowulf\u00eds death.\u00ee In Christian theory, Jesus Christ paid<br>for the sins of all people with his death on the cross. The treasure won<br>by Beowulf would be elvated to the \u00ectreasure\u00ee of live eternally in<br>paradise through Christ. Both Christ and Beowulf, as with his fight with<br>the dragon, scarified themselves to save others. It is clear that the<br>author thought highly of both loyalty and truth. Through poetic<br>expression of the author, Beowulf is seen as loyal and representative of<br>pure good.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The dragon on the other hand was evil to the core. 2824-2825: \u00ecthe<br>dragon from underneath, \/his nightmarish destroyer, \/ lay destroyed as<br>well, \/ utterly without life.\u00ee Good conquers evil.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Further, passages in Beowulf state (beginning line 2874) \u00ecGod who<br>ordains who wins or loses allowed him to strike with his own blade when<br>bravery was needed.\u00ee When **** stood behind Beowulf in the great fight<br>against the dragon, (2855) \u00ecthere was no way he could preserve his lord\u00eds<br>life on earth or alter in the least the Almighty\u00eds will. What God judged<br>right would rule what happened to every man, as it does this day.\u00ee This<br>is a metaphorical allusion to Christ dying on the cross for our sins. It<br>was God\u00eds will from the beginning, as Christ was the savior of every man,<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>woman and child, therefore the divine will could not be stopped.<br>*** In Christian texts we know that God judges the human soul after one\u00eds<br>death. The price Christ paid for sins what that he descended into hell<br>for three days, then rose from the dead and ascended into heaven.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Beowulf also \u00ecpaid\u00ee a heavy cost for a pile of rings (riches), in<br>which he paid for with his own life. It was said that those who \u00ecwalk in<br>the path of exile\u00ee will bow under woe. That line can be compared to<br>Biblical similarities pertaining to judgment of the wicked.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>***Thus the sin of Cain is a dramatic illustration of good vs. evil. In<br>Beowulf it is embellished with literal allusions to Christ as the savior,<br>or \u00ecGood\u00ee and Stain, being profoundly \u00ecevil\u00ee.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>***Morte Darthur, written by Sir Thomas Malory, is a ravishing British<br>literary work retelling the French version of the Death of Arthur. The<br>story is a romantic frolic in the life of Lancelot and his Queen.<br>Lancelot is a favorite knight of King Arthur. The seductive drama is<br>loaded with Christian allusions to the cause of forgiveness through<br>redemption.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>***The main theme of redemption in Morte Darthur has taken on a figurative<br>allusion to the biblical story of Cain killing able. However, other<br>Christian allusions appear through out the texts with no direct link to<br>the main theme.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** For example, there are twelve Knights of the Round Table and twelve<br>disciples of Jesus.<br>Lancelot is a traitor for sleeping with queen. In the story of Jesus\u00ed<br>crucifixion, Judas is the one who betrays Jesus.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The shame of betraying the king by sleeping with his queen weighs<br>heavily on Lancelot\u00eds heart. Lancelot says, \u00ecBut and ye be slain I will<br>take my death as meekly as ever did martyr take his death for Jesu Christ\u00ed<br>s sake.\u00ee Although Lancelot did not kill himself, the ideas portrayed have<br>strong religious allusion to Judas hanging himself after betraying Jesus.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Revenge for infidelity in Morte Darthur is achievable through the<br>death of Lancelot and the queen. Sir Gawain would also like revenge, \u00ecfor<br>the death of my brother Sir Garteh I shall seek Sir Lancelot throughout<br>seven kinds\u00ed realms but I hall slay him, or other else he shall slay me.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Lancelot is banished in Morte Darthur, part of the vengeance King<br>Author would seek for Lancelot. This is different from Beowulf, in which<br>Grendel and his kin were banished from the earth. Grendel was a direct<br>descendent of Cain, who committed fratricide.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Lancelot\u00eds affair, on the other hand, is a metaphoric allusion to the<br>Bible because King Arthur saw Lancelot as one of his kin, perhaps like a<br>brother.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** King Arthur stated, \u00ecthis day I sor missed thee, and alas that ever I<br>was against thee, for now have I my death, whereof Sir Gawain me warned in<br>my dream.\u00ee The dream King Arthur had was almost like a prophecy, another<br>common phenomenon in the Christian texts.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The death of Christ is centered on redemption if a soul should choose<br>to accept Christ and repent of all sins. Indirectly, a scene in Morte<br>Darthur is linked to this Christian philosophy by appearing to be a remake<br>of the days during Christ\u00eds trial.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** While King Arthur is lying on his death bed, he instructs Sir<br>Bedivere to throw his prized sword into water. Instead, Sir Bedivere<br>hides it under a tree. King Arthur, \u00ecah, traitor unto me and untrue, Said<br>King Arthur, \u00ecnow that thou betrayed me twice.\u00ee This symbolic<br>representation of one of the disciples of Jesus named Peter. Peter<br>betrayed Jesus twice on the night of his crucifixion. Sir Bedivere<br>betrayed the king twice on the night the king died.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The redemption theme thickens when Sir Bedivere, as Peter did, cries<br>to his king, \u00ecah, my lord Arthur, what shall become of me, now ye go from<br>me and leave me here alone among mine enemies\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** King assures Sir Bedivere all will be well. He says, \u00ecFor I must<br>into the vale of Avilion to heal me of my grievous wound and if thou hear<br>nevermore of me, pray for my soul.\u00ee Avilion said to be like an earthly<br>paradise. Jesus said he was going to paradise when he died on the cross.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The hermit, who finds King Arthur\u00eds body, says that some men in<br>England say King Arthur is not dead and that \u00ecmen say that he shall come<br>again and he shall win the Holy Cross.\u00ee This is a strong allusion to the<br>Christian theology that \u00eche (Jesus) shall come again to judge the quick<br>and the dead.\u00ee<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The striking references to the death of Christ symbolize the theme of<br>redemption through out the whole story. Repentance also occurs among the<br>queen and Lancelot, who die on separate death beds.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Before the death of Lancelot he had a vision of the death of the queen<br>Guinevere. In the vision he found remission of his sins.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** Queen Guinevere\u00eds parting words were, \u00ecI beseech Almighty God that I<br>may never have power to see Sir Lancelot with my worldly eyes.\u00ee This is a<br>major change in her heart, for she knew that deceiving the king was wrong.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** When Lancelot saw the queen, after she died, he wept. He also<br>repented, became ordained, and recited prayers. It was clear that<br>Lancelot was forgiven for his sins.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** \u00ecI trust I do not displease God, for he knoweth mine intent\u00f3for my<br>sorrow was not, not is not, for any rejoicing of sin, but my sorrow may<br>never have end.\u00ee<br>He also said (page 437) \u00ecme repenteth sore\u00ee which means, \u00ecI\u00edm sorry.\u00ee<br>Unlike Beowulf, Morte Darthur\u00eds Lancelot becomes \u00ecgood\u00ee because he<br>\u00ecrepented.\u00ee There is no shame on Lancelot\u00eds as he lay on his death bed.<br>The elaborate funeral for him was also a display of the people\u00eds<br>forgiveness, and they forgave him and he became \u00ecgood\u00ee in their eyes<br>though his repentance.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>*** The forgiveness of Lancelot\u00eds sins mimics Christian theology because<br>Christians believe that through repentance we are reunited with God. The<br>tribe of Cain was never reunited with God because neither Cain nor his<br>decedents asked God for forgiveness. 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